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Puppet Masters: Chapter 7

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Puppet Masters: Chapter 7

Disclaimer: I do not own Puppet Master Characters or any of the Full Moon Features movies. I do own the plot and my OC Characters Alexis, Revy and Jinx.

*Talk* = Puppet talk.
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Revy gasped as the door was flung open and was ceased by her throat and dragged out of the closet. The door was slammed shut on the two puppet before they could help there master.

Revy struggled to get free of him as he laughed as he pinned her to the wall daggling by her throat in his calloused hand.

He leaned in closer and Revy flung her fist out to punch him in the face but he saw it coming. He grabbed her fist with his free hand his face was inches from hers.

“I thought I exterminated all the rats in this place!” he spat at her.

Revy kicked at the man but he didn’t feel it the man must have been sneaking patent meds. Like most of the adults here at Bouldeston Institution for the mentally troubled tots and teens.

He just stood there in his bloodstained lab-coat chocking her, his eyes shining his crooked mouth that was too big for his face went wider in a smile that went wider than you'd think was possible.

Revy was in trouble.

He stuck a needle in her arm but Revy didn't scream. It hurt and she was starting to feel drowsy already. Revy felt her arm going numb. She couldn't get a clean shot at him.

He had an iron grip on Revy’s throat as she still dangled in the air by it. Revy kicked her heels into the walls pulling against him but he kept going down the hall.

Six-Shooter had made it to the handle and was just heavy enough that when he jumped on it after a while it gave and let the puppets out to see Revy being dragged down corner.

Blade let out an all mighty hiss his eyes popping out and Six-Shooter aimed his guns and raised his bandana.

Jinx was standing atop of the stairs glaring down at the intruders forcing her leg to endure the pain.

The three men kept their flashlights glued to her.  Jinx with her sickly complexion, dark ringed eyes, messy hair, and standing in a pitch-black hallway giving of an insane vibe with only the dim small light from the cheap flashlights to illuminate her from below was quite the unnerving sight to see.

It stalled the intruding demonic dolls and the three Sharpe Toys employees long enough for the puppets to get the drop on them.

“You're coming with us, toots.” Baby Oopsie Daisy declared let one rip and lunching himself at her.

Tunneler lined up a man and drilled into his foot. The man screamed in pain and horror dropping his flashlight as he was separated from his foot in a bloody sceptical.  

The others turner around to look the man’s flashlight continued to spin on the floor adding to the confusion. Baby Oopsie Daisy came with range of the creepy girl.

Jinx swung a fire poker at Baby Oopsie Daisy like a bat sending him back down the flight of stairs.

Pinhead had Mr Static in between his hands trying to rip him apart.

Torch back handed Zombietoid as the blond G.I. Joe wannabe slashed at him with his machete. One of the men made the fatal move to attack Torch and was seat a flame. Torch’s red eyes glowing like burning coal in the dark.

The man screamed in un-imaginable horror as every nerve in his body was alight with pain, throwing himself around in a desperate attempt to escape the encompassing flames on his body. The man begging for help as he tripped over his newly deceased co-worker that Tunneler had dispatched of.

Setting alight Revy’s couch and the curtains behind it.  

Jinx was strangling a guy with fire poker dangling from his back as he desperately tried to throw her off but Jinx clung on her feet couldn’t even touch the ground her legs just dangled as she tried to choke the man with Baby Oopsie Daisy frustrating attempting to sink its demonic teeth into her legs.

“Why don't you take a seat!” The man dragging Revy by her hissed at her as he flung her into a chair and before she could even move, her wrists and ankles were latched to the chair. Revy struggled but she couldn't get out.

The disgusting doctor starred at Revy with deranged eyes thinking about what sorts of horrible things he was going to do. He licked his lips and turned around to his equipment messing with syringes or something Revy couldn’t tell she was getting to limp to see what he was doing properly.

He turned back to Revy stepping closer to the chair. He suddenly placed his fingers to her forearm. Revy could feel him breathing on her. He was feeling for something then stuck a needle in her arm Revy bit back a yelp. He was drawing her blood!

There was a he~he~he and a loud angry hiss from behind the chair. Revy couldn't turn her head the back of the chair was too big to look over.

The deranged doctor starred at Six Shooter as he raised his guns at him and fired into his gut multiple times.

The clasps on Revy’s feet and wrists were sliced opened by Blade before he lunched himself and his knife into the doctor’s throat. Revy was feeling so sluggish she could barely think.

Whatever he had used in Revy was strong it was seriously messing her up. The doctor lay chocking on his own blood from the gashes flowing with red life from his throat.  

Revy was tripping over her own feet in the halls the halls were starting to look like one of those amusement park haunted houses.

Revy slid down one of the walls as Blade was flicking the last bits of blood off of his knife.


Here it is Puppet Masters: Chapter 7 :D (Big Grin) Let me know what you think. Sasami Sasasegawa (How thoughtful) [V10] 

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PumpkinQueen13's avatar
The puppets finally get some action~!  Poor Revy and Jinx though; hey, at least Jinx sorta scared the intruders only a little bit due to her appearance and Blade and Six-Shooter came to Revy's rescue~

This story is looking good so far. ^^





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Revy gasped as the door was flung open and was ceased by her throat and dragged out of the closet.


The word is "seized".



The door was slammed shut on the two puppet before they could help there master.


"puppet" should be "puppets"; "there" should be "their".



"I thought I exterminated all the rats in this place!"  he spat at her.


"he" should be capitalized.



...and standing in a pitch-black hallway giving of an insane vibe...


"of" should be "off".



Baby Oopsie Daisy declared let one rip and lunching himself at her.


"let" should be "letting"; "lunching" should be "launching".



The others turner around to look the man's flashlight, continued to spin on the floor adding to the confusion.  Baby Oopsie Daisy came with range of the creepy girl.


"turner" should be "turned"; "at" is missing between "look" and "the"; "continued" should be "continuing"; "with" should be "within".



Pinhead had Mr Static in between his hands trying to rip him apart.


"Mr" has a period at the end since it is an abbreviation of the word "mister".  This error occurred in the previous chapter as well.



One of the men made the fatal move to attack Torch and was seat a flame.  Torch's red eyes glowing like burning coal in the dark.


"seat" should be "set"; "aflame" is one word; "glowing" should be "glowed".



The man begging for help as he tripped over his newly deceased co-worker that Tunneler dispatched of.


"Begging" should be "begged"; "dispatched" should be "disposed".



Jinx was strangling a guy with fire poker...


"the" is missing between "with" and "fire".



Baby Oopsie Daisy frustrating attempting to sink its demonic teeth into her legs.


"frustrating" should be "frustratingly"; "legs" should be "leg" unless Baby Oopsie Daisy is going after both of Jinx's legs.



"Why don't you take a seat!"


The dialogue is also a question, a question mark should be placed before the exclamation mark.



The disgusting doctor starred at Revy with deranged eyes...


"stared" only has 1 R; this error occurs more than once.



...Revy couldn't tell she was getting to limp to see what he was doing properly.


"to" should be "too"



...before he lunched himself and the knife into the doctor's throat.


"lunched" should be "lunged"


The doctor lay chocking on his own blood...


"choking" does not have another C.  This error occurs more than once.




That is all for the critiquing of this story until you post another chapter. ^^